Maybe if you made it into a chapter story it’d be better, and not so hurried. Okxxx Maybe if you made it into a chapter story it’d be better, and not so hurried. Will you be mine?READERReport 2007-10-28 14:15:35So sick and stupidREADERReport 2004-08-12 13:59:49stupid«1» Maybe if you made it into a chapter story it’d be better, and not so hurried. Will you be mine?READERReport 2007-10-28 14:15:35So sick and stupidREADERReport 2004-08-12 13:59:49stupid«1» The ending seems rather abrupt. Will you be mine?READERReport 2007-10-28 14:15:35So sick and stupidREADERReport 2004-08-12 13:59:49stupid«1» Will you be mine?READERReport 2007-10-28 14:15:35So sick and stupidREADERReport 2004-08-12 13:59:49stupid«1» So great! The ending seems rather abrupt. Also, I hate to be a grammar nazi, but the continuous flow, instead of proper paragraphs with the dialogue make it difficult to read.
