2 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-03-23 11:57:30good start, needs more, its like an intro more than an actual story.anonymous readerReport 2012-01-09 00:37:44How could any of this be better stated? 2 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-03-23 11:57:30good start, needs more, its like an intro more than an actual story.anonymous readerReport 2012-01-09 00:37:44How could any of this be better stated? XXX 2 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-03-23 11:57:30good start, needs more, its like an intro more than an actual story.anonymous readerReport 2012-01-09 00:37:44How could any of this be better stated? 2 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-03-23 11:57:30good start, needs more, its like an intro more than an actual story.anonymous readerReport 2012-01-09 00:37:44How could any of this be better stated? 2 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-03-23 11:57:30good start, needs more, its like an intro more than an actual story.anonymous readerReport 2012-01-09 00:37:44How could any of this be better stated?
