You have a great story line, but slow down and give more detail.READERReport 2005-11-16 09:21:42Great story line ! Porn Needs A lot more details. You have a great story line, but slow down and give more detail.READERReport 2005-11-16 09:21:42Great story line ! Needs A lot more details. Take your time, seems like you were in A rush to finish.READERReport 2004-05-04 17:48:13wow i wish i was there«1» 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-05-22 20:14:25I agree with the other reviewer. Take your time, seems like you were in A rush to finish.READERReport 2004-05-04 17:48:13wow i wish i was there«1» 3 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2012-05-22 20:14:25I agree with the other reviewer. You have a great story line, but slow down and give more detail.READERReport 2005-11-16 09:21:42Great story line !
