i was definatly captured all the way to the end. Though i did get lost a few times along the way i believe this was to do with the lack of detail and description of there settings. XXX 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!! i was definatly captured all the way to the end. WordytomvtsReport 2008-10-26 06:29:19great story, more please«1» 3 comments«1»aceofhartsReport 2008-10-27 07:55:27Excellent story!!!!! I apologize if I insult you, but I feel you have potential. The “D” was pure hoke. Though i did get lost a few times along the way i believe this was to do with the lack of detail and description of there settings. Don’t be clever until you first become a writer. The “D” was pure hoke. Though i did get lost a few times along the way i believe this was
