That’s all you needed to say. Who wears a bra to bed? Free porn 1/10READERReport 2005-09-07 09:13:23Hannah, you have a pretty good geasp of the language but the inconsistancies hurt the story. You put a lot of effort into a story, make it count. Keep writing Hannah.«12» 1/10READERReport 2005-09-07 09:13:23Hannah, you have a pretty good geasp of the language but the inconsistancies hurt the story. to paraphrase St Bobo, erotica is pretty straight forward, its all about setting, characters, and descriptions. You forgot “What happened to her hymen?”
Shit story. KREADERReport 2005-09-08 07:20:59Archaic, your ridiculous critique is longer than the story. Did she orgasm? I give the story a 7 more if he would have described better.READERReport 2006-01-01 21:30:28great story. Keep writing Hannah.«12» If they had been kissing before this weekend and in the park, than why do they
